Thursday, September 11, 2008

My Better Half....

I wrote this while i was back in my bed under the lamp reflecting on me & my day so far. It just came naturally to me. Do tell me if you could guess about her from the post as you go read it....

An impression of my self
An outline of my soul
An image of my stature
An incomplete part of my whole

Follows me everywhere
Changing places as I go
She’s darker than most I have seen
But brighter than my core

At times she goes hides herself
Behind me because she’s shy
Sometimes she heightens herself
Watching the bright lights go by

Who is she? I sometimes wonder
Where’s she from? I do not care
Did we meet before is not the question
But instead what brought her here?

I broke the ice, tried talking to her
Asked her out on a date
She’s lost in her world, too busy with herself
Keeps ignoring me off late

Though hesitant still headstrong
She makes up her mind on me
To hang around till I am finally gone
She loves me so much you see

I am in utter bliss of forgotten loneliness
For I will have her around till I am dead
Don’t worry my friend she won’t break my heart
She’s not just any other girl but my shadow instead....

Do tell me if you guessed it right.M sure some got fooled!!!!

70 comments:

Anonymous said...

One of the bests so far with an unexpected humour. Intriguing, disappointing too :( but a smart finish...but you missed one part...She's not with you always. She leaves you everyday for few hours...most of the time...all alone...

Anonymous said...

I wouldn't know who she is but I'll just say that I love the way you've described her :)

Anonymous said...

PS: Would you disable word verification? Its too cumbersome! :P

lukkydivz said...

after the first 8 lines she was guessable :)

lovely!

Yashu said...

wow! nice... loved the first few lines...! awesome! :)

Cess said...

usually i m not a big fan of poems, mostly because english is not my mother tongue and i don t get all the subtlety of a poem, so i get frustrated when i don t understand it, not smart enough to get it ;( but i m glad i found the shadow before the end of the poem. I m so not an expert on poem, so my opinion does not really count, but i like this poem ;)

Trinaa said...

i got it from d 3rd n 4th lines.. :))
nice one..keep em coming...:)

whoami said...

Loved it :) I would rate this as the best one from you. You should have mentioned that she is not with you at night ;-)

Sameera Ansari said...

Were you talking about one's shadow?

Nice poem!

Rakesh Vanamali said...

Chirag

Amazing lines, written with ease, yet powerful.
I like the way you've personified "her"

keep the good work going!

Cheers

Rakesh

DMulan said...

nice work!
i had a hunch by the second stanza, when you said she follows me everywhere.. and then it was confirmed in the third.
ha! i'm smart :P

btw, blog rolled you :)

PI said...

interesting. i did guess it, but the flow of ideas was beautiful!

Meow said...

Tumne bulaaya aur hum chale aaye :)

N I guessed your better half from your introductory lines itself..Goddd am I smart???? :) :)

Tk Care
Love
Meow

Anonymous said...

I dint get fooled :P

For me these lines gave away -
"
Sometimes she heightens herself
Watching the bright lights go by
"

But I really like it :)

Good one :)

Gunjan Aylawadi said...

i got fooled :(
:P

megha puNAter" said...

shadow,i guessed in the second verse.good one.
thank you for passing by my blog,that paint box is envious,will stop by again

Jayashree and Just Jay said...

Follows me everywhere
Changing places as I go
She’s darker than most I have seen
But brighter than my core

Simple but powerful lines.. very neatly and beautifully expressed.

Don’t worry my friend she won’t break my heart
She’s not just any other girl but my shadow instead....

Very beautiful lines..

Keep writing such beautiful poems you have long way to go for becoming a great writer....

Cheers!
J

Gagan said...

Nice :)

Chaggoholic.... said...

Sanjh my dear thank u so much and ya she does leave me for a while but those are the times i m not really lookin for her either....

Queenie well i said she's ma shadow. Thanx for d comments. My pleasure....

Thanks Divz. M so glad u came by. Plz kp comin. I m usually up wid a new one in 4-5 days....

Thnx Yashu. Sweet of u....

Chaggoholic.... said...

Cess for me its more than enuf if someone jus comes by and leaves a hi! U did that and hey thnx for the comment. Kp comin....

Trinaa don worry m totally hooked to bloggin now so the posts shall kp comin. Provided u too kp comin....

Whoami thnx da. Well at night wen i sleep she becomes a part so close that sayin that i hug sleepin her also wud be wrong....

Chaggoholic.... said...

Thnx Sameera u guessed it right....

Thnx rakesh ma frnd.Appreciation frm gud frnds like u always motivates to kp writin.Kp comin dear....

Divya u are smart;) well thnx for blog rollin me dear. I m really grateful....

Thnx @pseudo plz kp comin dear.Postin invites is such a task....

Chaggoholic.... said...

Meow meri jaan aap aaye thank u. Next time se bulaane ki zaroorat na pade to aapki sehat behtar hoga:P

Veens thanx da kp comin re....

Gunj sorry dear didnt intend to.Hehe thnx for comin and kp comin

Gagan thnx dear.Kp comin....

Keshi said...

Lovely!


**For I will have her around till I am dead


that line sort of gave it away :) cos we cant guarantee that our partners can be with us til we r dead.

But u wrote it really well!


Keshi.

Chaggoholic.... said...

@inspiration(J) thnx dear for a praise i m still not really worthy of. But i really cherish ur comment.Thnx and plz kp comin....

aria said...

well I knew what you were talking about coz of your comment.

I'd say yours is far better.. the beginning rocks..

Nita said...

aw i cheated! i saw the last line first! sorry! it's sweet though. loved the description. thanks for your comment on my blog. wonder how you even noticed. :-)

Chaggoholic.... said...

Hey Megha thanx so much. I checkd the new version of the paint box.Its nowhere compared to what u hv.I m still jealous:(

Keshi my dear thnx da. Kp comin....

Aria hey fir se mutual admiration soceity.i said na u r better bas then u r better;) Thanx da Hehe....

Nita thanx dear for the comments.Glad u came. Well i noticed and will now on continue noticin so kp postin and kp comin....

Jayashree and Just Jay said...

Hey, you are already half battle won for becoming a great writer..... Way to go.. Hip Hip Hurray!!!

Lena said...

i was so sure it was the shadow :)
But beautifully written. I loved it :)

Unknown said...

I love the way you described it...difficult to make out whether you talked bout shadow or a girl !!!

Commendable job done !! I am proud of you ....

Cheers !!
Angel

Akshaya Kamalnath said...

Yup guessed it..but nice descryption.

Chaggoholic.... said...

Inspiration or J thnx again da....

Lena thnx for the comment.Kp comin....

Rajni my dear u hv to be more regular wid me else gonna stinkers....

Akshaya thnx for comin.Plz kp comin....

rantravereflect/ jane said...

bwuauhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh :)
your shadow..
thta was shadawholic ;)

you did get me--> i really thought it was a girl..

you should have added these two lines..

she's so stuck to me,
that she's ryte behind me even when i pee. ;);)
i wonder why she's around
only when the sun is bright and round..
when it gets depressing and dark
she leaves me alone, cold n stark..

maybe because i chose to see her when all's good and gay
and keep her in the depths of my heart when things go nay..



:)

junkie said...

i think the sentence before the poem was a give away....:) guessed it right in the first stanza..:)...but a well written poem nonetheless

Benaam Badnaam said...

i doubt anybody would've fallen for it...but it definitely was well written...i wroe something like it long way back...'the shadow people'

keep doodling :)

Sheetal Sukhija said...

I agree with Junkie,
"Do tell me if you could guess about her from the post as you go read it..." Sure give away. Reading your previous posts, I kinda figured and moreover the first line, "An impression of my self..."

Anyway what has caught me wondering is why it is a she? Ahmm intriguing thought that is...

Sheetal :)

crystal ship said...

well...thnks for your comment:)
and as far as your better half goes....guessed it after thr 4th line....nice poem:)

Chaggoholic.... said...

Jane i luv the fact thats she's behind even wen i pee.LOL Thnx for the wonderful lines....

Thnx Junkie for the lovely comments.Kp comin

Thnx Mystic.Kp comin....

Thnx Sheetal. I wud love to wonder why its a she but i guess bcoz i want it 2be a she;)....

Thnx Crystal.Nice u came by....

Unknown said...

Thanks for your nice words on my work..Just read your peom..it is nicely written! :)

HP said...

ah a poet !
i got from almost the beginning since u'd mentioned "under the lamp"
good work. keep them coming!

Unknown said...

thanks for the comment on my blog...

that's a nice piece...
but the Shadow was quite easy to get :)


best,
Lavannya

mixdbrew said...

i did guess that! but why goldie? that one, i cudn't guess.

Neers said...

tera saaya kahi toh bolega main sunta raha parchaaiyaan...


thank you ... for this treat

Chaggoholic.... said...

Thanks HP.M glad u came.Plz kp visitin....

@perspective Thnx for ur comments.Kp comin....

Mixdbrew well i told why goldie on ur blog.thnx for comin dear.Kp visitin....

Neers the pleasure is totally mine.Thnx for commentin.Kp droppin by....

Gauri said...

Hey Chirag ! very well written ..loved the post..was just wondering if its ur shadow your talking about then why the she?;) enjoyed reading none the less.
Will be back !

Shilpa said...

hey Chaggo,

Good one.
I guessed when I read the 5th line. The 6th line confirmed by guess.

But it isn't it a little unusual that you refer to your own shadow as feminine?

Shilpa

Anonymous said...

First up- the welcome msg is such a departure frm d usual blogs ;-) (referring to- leave ur comment)

Second- very well written..ans is obvious ;-

Third- thnx for dropping by mu blog

n salsa sounds interesting!

Unknown said...

sometimes she heightens herself ... gave it away
he he ...
thnx for dropping by
you hv a nice blog
will be visiting more often nw

Parul Gupta said...

hey i couldn't guess who is she till the last line...i thought she is some lady in ur life...hmmmm...

Chaggoholic.... said...

Gauri, thnx dear for droppin by and leavin me a sweet comment.Well i guess its nice havin a she around rather than a HE;)

Shilpa thanx for comin dear.Kp comin....

Swats thnx for ur sweet appreciation of the blog and the welcome msg.Plz kp comin.Yup salsa is cool, really cool....

@Descryin the shadows thnx to u man for comin by.Yup hope to see u around....

Parul dear i did tell in the end its my Shadow!Thnx for comin.Plz do drop in nxt time as well....

Gauri Mathur said...

heyyyy!!!!!:-)
A very sweet poem,beautiful :-)

Keep Empowering:-))
take care:)))

Unknown said...

very easy to read, it just flows ^^ i really liked it

ps. thanks for stopping by my blog :D

Nidz said...

I knew it, it was shadow..hey pls remove word verification in comments.

man in painting said...

Refreshing..
ofcourse it was predictable..
but i was ready to wait till the end..
nice work dude..
MIP

Shravan Vijayaprasad said...

I didn't get it till the very end!! Did you write it all by urself?? Wow!!

P.s: Awaiting you in my blog. Would love to have your comments!!

Bhai with Chai said...

for once, i could see that coming!
:) nice , nonetheless!

Enduring the Babbles of Life said...

hey chirag...stumbled upon ur blog while hiking the blogging world. liked ur take on shadow...wish it was 'love' and not 'necessity' that kept her following 'u'/'us' ;)

keep up the good work...will drop by later.

Best,

Chaggoholic.... said...

Hey Gauri thnx dear for droppin by. Kp comin....

Noelia i m still quite illiterate on the Shakespearean stuff;)LOL so prefer keepin it simple and flowy.Thnx for comin by and kp visitin....

Nidhi thnx dear and ya ur request hs been approved....

Chaggoholic.... said...

Man in Painting thnx man for comin by and waitin till d end.Hope to see u around....

Shrav m glad u liked it.Thnx for comin.Next i m comin on ur post.Be around....

Thnx Bhai wid chai, appreciate ur comment....

Durba thnx so much for stumblin upon my blog.Wud luv to see u more often. tc and thnx

joie de vivre said...

u want gf
or u already hav..or u miss her
jo bhi hai

liked ur better half

Chaggoholic.... said...

Joidevivre thnx for liking my better half but ur interpretation is totally wrong. Plz nothin of that sort is there.I am talkin about my shadow dear.Thats about it....

mixdbrew said...

comAh! now i see light... ;)

Anonymous said...

:) ya i did move on..and feels great.. :)

Shadow said...

i like this!

Chaggoholic.... said...

Hey Mixedbrew was it an (,) COMAh u said or com AAAH now i see light;) LOL Well anyways thnx for comin....

Anonymous well glad u hv.Kp comin dear.Hope u read my new one....

Shadow well here is a poem on u:) Glad u liked it....

Fali said...

:) that was a good one. and i didnt get fooled!

AlenaRosa said...

I really like this, I have a guess, but would stupid if it was wrong so I'll keep it to myself.

work_of_fiction? said...

good one dude!
Though hesitant still headstrong
She makes up her mind on me
To hang around till I am finally gone
She loves me so much you see

is mushy, but beautiful!

Chaggoholic.... said...

Fali thnx dear for comin by and also not gettin fooled.Kudos....

AlenaRosa m glad u liked it. Thnx....

Work of fiction thnx man....

Unknown said...

awesome..am speechless..
Itz beautiful,comes out so natural, thoughts turned into words...wow...truely a master piece!!!


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